I love your opening Joey. As Rob McLean the Travel Writer told me at a class one time, all the classic Cowboy movies had a cowboy riding into town for the opening sequence. It draws the viewer in to the whole plot, get's them asking questions. who is he? what's he doing? is he good or bad? etc etc
In my humble opinion Joey, you've got yourself a cowboy my friend.
Best of luck.
PS. Don't give away any more of the plot to anybody. If you reveal it you might just have to follow the path you've just revealled and sometimes (in fact usually), it doesn't work that way.
Thanks Zaksame - I am now playing my cards much closer to my chest.
I have written a bit more but am taking it nice and steady and only writing when I am fully inspired. I don't want to write anything half-assed!
Your comments have given me hope that I can write something that people will want to read. I'm not too fussed about getting published (though it would be lovely) but rather am interested in pushing myself, sharing my love of the written word, and hopefully making a few people smile along the way.
One more thing Joey, for what it's worth. You say you only write when you're inspired, in my experience, and in every course I've been on or given I would say "WRITE EVERY DAY". It doesn't matter what it is, the walk to the shop, the colour of your socks, an annoying person you met, the weather, anything in fact. What you're doing is excercising the part of your brain you use when writing, plus you're putting together some ideas that you have no idea just now when you might eventually need them.
But as I said before, you have the Cowboy, now bring him to life... Best of luck, it's not easy.
Oh, and one more thing... if you haven't read Mohsin Hamid's novel 'The Reluctant Fundamentalist' I strongly recommend you do. I finished it in one sitting.
Thanks mate - will certainly look that book up. I am currently getting a lot of inspiration from Jonny Bealby's books - granted they are non-fiction travelogues but they are very well written.
I take your point about writing a little something everyday. I do occasionally find myself sitting at my desk and something pops into my head - my gmail inbox is full of words/sentences/paragraphs I have emailed to myself. Those little snippets I guess will either go somewhere or not.
It's great fun.
good luck joey! enjoy the journey and keep it up, you'll be half way through in now time!